Mrs Elizabeth Darcy

Destiny: Finally in town, she flipped back her hair and thought about what the weird guy had said. "I want the fairy"? What on earth could that mean? "He was ...

See Note before my editing of Prologue. OK. I had this whole thing edited perfectly and thoroughly and then I made a stupid mistake and deleted the whole thing, and ...

Okay, I know you wrote this ages ago, and that's why I haven't posted on it, but I just couldn't resist, to tell the truth. You've got a great story ...

How very, very, very, true. Zonk. TPBM likes Star Trek.

Entity "Sounds good to me." She glanced up at him, then back down at the ground. "So...I'll see you tomorrow," he rejoined half heartedly. "Sure," she replied, but neither one ...

Uh, well, just one thing... 'This is good", The comma should be inside the quotation marks, and also you used one quote at the beginning and two at the end...? ...

Wow. For a new writer, I'm amazed. For any writer, actually, it was very good. The imagery is so compelling! I love how you used fire and ice and ashes ...

I stood below A maple tree And looked up into the sky. I heard an inward voice cry, “Climb!” It was calling out to me! “See what’s out in your ...

Entity He recovered himself and leaned back on his heels. "Well, hoping might not be enough." "What do you mean?" "I mean, you could start looking right away." "With you ...

VERY nice contrast, I agree---one of the first things I noticed; thought it was well done! His skin now scared with malice scar r ed A well done presentation of ...

I dropped my legos on the floor I’d been working on them for a week or more I had a castle, an ocean too, And now they’re gone, all gone, ...

Well done! I like the "beams phosphorescent" and you've got a good sense of rhythm and rhyme. A couple things: "Shone" is the past tense of "shine." I don't think ...

I agree with every single praise that's been issued before me and only have one comment: "May I be of your assistance," said a voice in the wind. Try a ...

Just one thing for the moment...Could you rewrite the line that talks about budding pink capillaries? I know that's anatomically correct and that 'roses' is way cliched but...Well, let me ...

Just one thing I noticed....I think it's "one and the same" and not "one in the same..." Excellent writing. I agree completely. I love the stanza We hurt the same ...